UC知道将英语写话延伸
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Last Winter Holiday
Last winter, I went to Jiangsu. The weather was bad. It was snowy. I didn't like the food there. It was yucky. I did a lot of things in winter. I went to museums and saw many interesting things. I wrote a letter to my friend. It was very happy.
Last winter, I went to Jiangsu. The weather was bad. It was snowy. I didn't like the food there. It was yucky. I did a lot of things in winter. I went to museums and saw many interesting things. I wrote a letter to my friend. It was very happy.
So my friend told me why not go to zhejiang.he said the scene is very beautiful in Hangzhou.the clear West Lake,the evergreen trees and the colourful flowers.and the traditional snacks are very delicious. wow!it is a heaven of human indeed!it made me exciting after i had heard of the words he said. So we decided to go to Hangzhou this Summer.
楼上写的不错，LZ写得也很好
但是要注意几点
1 你用I过多，会让人看了后会觉得很不耐烦
2 要换换句子的形式，就是说你用subject-verb（主题-动词）的形式过多也会让人看了后会觉得说很不耐烦。可以换换其他的句型~