UC知道我的personal statement!求求哪位高手帮我点评！！
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Hello!My name is 123.I am from Beijing,China.I am a talktive,kind-hearted girl who is fond of singing.
I was a foreign exchange student in Madelia High School ,Minnesota,US for 2007-2008 school year.In June ,2008,I graduated from the best class of one of the key high schools in beijing---No.X high school.
Being an exchange student was the best experience in my past entire 12 years school life.I think I gained the ability to deal with things,to take care of others and myself by living in a foreign country,without the accompany of parents and friends,facing a new language.My english became much fluenter compare to the very first time I came to US through this ten-month program.Because of that,I got 96 in my toefl ibt test.It helped me not only with my english,but also let me know more about the culture and the education of America.The variety activities in high school here gave me lots of chances to develop my skill.During the time
I studyed there,I joi
I was a foreign exchange student in Madelia High School ,Minnesota,US for 2007-2008 school year.In June ,2008,I graduated from the best class of one of the key high schools in beijing---No.X high school.
Being an exchange student was the best experience in my past entire 12 years school life.I think I gained the ability to deal with things,to take care of others and myself by living in a foreign country,without the accompany of parents and friends,facing a new language.My english became much fluenter compare to the very first time I came to US through this ten-month program.Because of that,I got 96 in my toefl ibt test.It helped me not only with my english,but also let me know more about the culture and the education of America.The variety activities in high school here gave me lots of chances to develop my skill.During the time
I studyed there,I joi
需要改动的地方还是蛮多的。。 很多遣词造句的方式感觉都不是那么成熟。。
另外同意楼上。。
能说出自身优点是伱全篇PS的长处。不过如果这份PS是交给大学看的，就更要写伱今后的志向，并且要表现出伱愿意为你的理想而奋斗。大学都喜欢有志向和理想的学生。
我自己的PS就是这样写的，我被NYU录取了。或许我们情况不同吧，只是个人建议。