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20th.JULY.08
A shock
I have two dogs.Both of them are docile and understanding.Every morning and evening ,they go out to play for half an hour and come back themseves .I love them very much . Some friends had warned me to be careful,but i never take it to heart .Today they gave me a shock.After lunch, i was on the computer,.Tony,one of two dogs barked to go out.I sent them out and sat back to computer.I forgot them till i heard a bark almost one hour after i had sant them out.I opened the door immediatly and saw only BILY sitting at the door.I Whistled Tony,but there was no response.I started to worry about ,because he was the most docile one of two dogs .He always comes back and sits at the door after plying for a while and never goes away.I went out without hesitate.I was whistling while i was looking for him.I Hope wherever he was he could come as usual .But half an hour past,i had searched all the buildings and bushes in our housing estate,he didn't come,nobody had

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20th. JULY. 2008
A shock
I have two dogs, *both of which are docile and understanding. Every morning and evening, they go out to play for half an hour and come back themselves. I love them very much, *despite my friends ’ warning to be careful. *However, today they gave me a shock. After lunch, I was *surfing the Internet, when Tony, one of two dogs, barked to go out. I sent them out and *sat back to my seat. I *totally forgot them till I heard a bark almost *one hour later. I opened the door immediately and saw Billy sitting at the door, without Tony. I Whistled for Tony, without any response. I started to worry about him, as he is the most docile one. He always comes back and sits at the door after playing for a while and never goes away. I went out *without hesitation. I was whistling while *looking for him. But half an hour past, searching all the buildings and bushes