帮看下我着篇英语,关于语法错误什么的~

来源：百度知道 编辑：UC知道 时间：2024/07/08 11:28:39
Too much things happend this week,about stomachache,lonely,missing and love~

Stayed up all night,and didn't have meal on time made my stomach hurt so badly,

but u hurted my heart. It fell to pieces.U still not care me,i know it clearly in the end.

I really didn't konw if i was selfish in the past. I want 2 gave u everything that i

could in my way,but with out asked. Because i knew u didn't like that. U didn't love

me,rignt? U just wanted the girl who she's gone,u missing her every night.

So who am i? A outsider or a joker? I feel so sorry 4 myslef...

The day before yesterday was my most happniess day these years.Felt so security

when depend on ur shoulder. How i wished time could stop~but u didn't know. It was

obvious that u didn't know me,u treated me just like a little sister,that was not i want!

I need ur love,i want it...But why u to

我觉得第二行
“Stayed up all night,and didn't have meal on time made my stomach hurt so badly.”中应该改成“Having stayed up all night and not having had meal on time made my stomach hurt so badly."

"Stayed up all night,and didn't have meal on time "是分词的被动形式，应改成表示主动的现在分词，用having done形式。
第三行
“but u hurted my heart”中hurted应改成hurt, hurt 的过去式和过去分词都是它本身。
第四行
建议把in the past改成before
"I want 2 gave u"把gave改成give。（我个人建议把文章里的人称正式化，u不想改就随便了,i 还是改成 I 吧，是第一人称啊，建议把2还是改成to吧，看着有些迷糊，呵呵）
第五行
“but with out asked”把with和out连写成without,把asked改成asking ，without后面得加名词或动词ing形式。
六行
把rignt改成right
"the girl who she's gone"应改成“the girl who's gone"
"u missing her every night"建议改成“and you miss her every night"，"u missing her every night"在逗号后面写有些不和语法。
第七行
“A outsider or a joker? ”应改成 An outsider or a joker?
myslef 应改成myself
八行
“my most ha