UC知道英语高手进！！作文修改！！！
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帮忙看下以下作文,或有语法错误或用词不当,或是你有更好，更有水平的句子来替代某一句,都来帮忙下,我在这里谢谢大家了.
About me
My English name is Jude. I am just 16 years old. I study in a junior middle school. My height is 166 cm.
I like reading in my spare time, especially on the aspect of history. However, I am not a hard-working person. In the past, my favourite sport activity was playing badminton, instead of it, now I like playing table tennis more.
Sometimes I am not confident, but always friendly to everyone. I like making friends with all kinds of people.
I love my family and my country. My best wish is to let the world full of love!
About me
My English name is Jude. I am just 16 years old. I study in a junior middle school. My height is 166 cm.
I like reading in my spare time, especially on the aspect of history. However, I am not a hard-working person. In the past, my favourite sport activity was playing badminton, instead of it, now I like playing table tennis more.
Sometimes I am not confident, but always friendly to everyone. I like making friends with all kinds of people.
I love my family and my country. My best wish is to let the world full of love!
About me
My English name is Jude. I am just 16 years old. I study in a junior middle school. My height is 166 cm.
I like reading in my spare time, especially on the aspect of history. However, I am not a hard-working person. In the past, my favourite sport was playing badminton, instead of it, now I like playing table tennis more.
Sometimes I am not confident, but I always friendly to everyone. I like making friends with all kinds of people.
I love my family and my country. My wish is to let the world full of love
activity删
making变make
best wish中的best删
（看你的作文，有种不爽的感觉）太单调了
还有all 改为every吧
最后一句有语法错误，full是形容词，应在其前加be.文章的缺点是简单句过多，几乎没复合句，如果用几个定语从句或宾语从句，那会是一个不错的采分点。