麻烦看一下这小段翻译对吗?

Andy wanted Red to promise him that if he could get out of the prison, he would go and find a particular hayfield which is near to Buxton. That’s where he asked his wife to marry him. And there’s a box buried under a piece of black volcanic glass below a big oak. If he found it, he would know what was happened.

肖申克的救赎

さゆ - 高级经理 六级的大致正确了，就有几个小地方稍微修改下

Andy wanted Red to promise him that if he could get out of the prison, he would go and find a particular hayfield which is near to Buxton. That was where he had asked his wife to marry him. And there was a box buried under a piece of black volcanic glass below a big oak. If he found it, he would know what happened.

LZ，看到你前半句，用过去时，那后面也得跟着一致
有些句子不需要啄字翻译，有几句可以连在一起，用定语重句，这样整个短文看上简洁明了

除了情态动词后可以用原型，其他的你都改成过去式吧。
另外，求婚可以用propose to sb.这样比你的表达简洁多了。
总体还是可以的。

似乎是肖申克的救赎中的段子。

第一行最后一个“a”应该用“the”.后面应该是that's the place he asked...后面把句子断开，“找到。。。”重新起一句话，英文和中文格式不一样，不能这么说的。He can find t