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Keeping pets
In recent years, there are a sharply increased number of people who would like keeping pets such as dogs, cats and birds. But some people believe that pets can make a lot of noises to neighbors especially to the old people, who may not sleep well by noises come from the dogs or birds lived near to his apartment. They also argue that some diseases could be widely spread through keeping pets to the human.
In spite of those arguments, most of people who think that there is no evidence to show that pets must be responsible for those bad things such as diseases or noises. They point out that keeping pets can reduce loneliness to adults and children. They emphasize that dogs are the best friends of people in today’s indifferent society. What’s more, keeping pets might lead to a warmly atmosphere of our living communities.
In my opinion, I inclined to agree with later point of view. It is self-evident that the advantages of keeping pets are over
In recent years, there are a sharply increased number of people who would like keeping pets such as dogs, cats and birds. But some people believe that pets can make a lot of noises to neighbors especially to the old people, who may not sleep well by noises come from the dogs or birds lived near to his apartment. They also argue that some diseases could be widely spread through keeping pets to the human.
In spite of those arguments, most of people who think that there is no evidence to show that pets must be responsible for those bad things such as diseases or noises. They point out that keeping pets can reduce loneliness to adults and children. They emphasize that dogs are the best friends of people in today’s indifferent society. What’s more, keeping pets might lead to a warmly atmosphere of our living communities.
In my opinion, I inclined to agree with later point of view. It is self-evident that the advantages of keeping pets are over
1.there are a sharply increased number of people who would like keeping pets such as dogs,这句中increased应改为increasing
2. who may not sleep well by noises come from the dogs or birds lived ...中的介词by应改为with
3. They also argue that some diseases could be widely spread through keeping pets to the human.这句话的错误非常严重 已经不是更别词汇使用不当的问题，如果作者是想表达“疾病会在宠物与人类间广泛传播”也应该用“among”而不是“through...to”这样不知所谓的介词组合
4. keeping pets might lead to a warmly atmosphere这里的warmly应改为warm.
语句尚算通顺 百分制的话应该可以得到70分左右的成绩.
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简单错误不少