UC知道请帮我看一下这篇文章的用词,tense,和其他错误 (英语老师进)
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Wars cause so much misery to the people involved, both during and after the wars. Even after the wars ended, the memory of them continues to haunt the survivors during their everyday lives. Some of these survivors did not only trap themselves in their memories, they bring the next generation into the trap as well by projecting their experience on them. This occurrence, according to Marianne Hirsch in her article “Projected Memory: Holocaust Photographs in Personal and Public Fantasy”, is the origin of the postmemory of the second generation who grew up under the narratives of the traumas that the previous generation had experienced. The comic book Maus: A Survivor’s Tale by Art Spiegelman is an example of the idea. In the comic, Spiegelman tells a story of his father’s experience during the Holocaust in Auschwitz. In addition, this comic portrays the interaction between Spiegelman and his
Pretty good. :)
Remember though in such essays tenses should be consistent, i.e. in your 3rd sentence there "Some of these survivors did not only..." should be changed to "Some of these survivors do not only..."
With the same reason, the sentence "... is the origin of the postmemory of the second generation who grew up under the narratives..." should have "grew" changed to "grows".
As for stronger and more argumentative thesis, my suggestion is to give a clearer idea to readers what you are about to write, to prove the point that postmemory of wars are existing in the 2nd generation? or to write about this comic book writer who is a victum of war as well? or to argue that this comic book was written because of the effect wars have to the survivors and 2nd generation of the survivors?
Please ignore what zy319506 wrote except his 2 point. That's a typical Chinese picking grammar mistakes in a