help angain

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Nice to see you,我是X，并驻守在深圳XX工厂，我想要一台IBM X60给自己用

请问是否可以这样写：
Nice to see you,I'm X and station at Shenzhen XX office,I want to have 1set of IBM X60 Netbook for myself,Could you please let me know the price?

求求各位！

Nice to see you 是面对面讲话时用的，不应用在书信中；station解释为“驻守”时一般是表示军队驻扎，所以不适宜用在这里；笔记本电脑是notebook而不是netbook
上面的那句话可以修改如下：
Hello, my name is X and I work at the Shenzhen XX Factory. I'd like to buy an IMB X60. Could you please tell me the price?

Nice to see you,I'm X. I'm an employee of Shenzhen XX office.I need a IBM X60 for own use.Could you please let me know the price? thanks.

Nice to see you,I'm X. I'm an employee of Shenzhen XX company.I need an IBM X60 for myself.Could I know the price?

Nice to see you,I'm X ,now at Shenzhen XX office,I would like to have 1 set of IBM X60 Netbook ,Could you please tell me the price?

参考下 呵呵

1， 如果是书面形式不要用 nice to see you. 第一不地道，第二你不是真的见到他。 Nice to meet you. 见面的时候用。

2. station 不合适！

3. 笔记本不是用set为量词。

给你写一个：
Hi, I am XXX in Shenzheng. I want to buy a laptop, IBM X60, for myself. Could you please tell me the current price?