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下面这篇是我刚刚写的一篇作文。。希望高手可以帮我看看。。
指出哪里有语法错误，哪里需要改进。。真的谢谢啦。。
帮帮我吧。。T_T..
题目是这样的啊
1.数字化产品如今得到广泛使用，例如：
2.数字化产品的使用对人们工作学习生活深远影响
The Digital Age
With the development of science and technology, digital products are becoming increasingly popular. According to a recent survey, about 82% of Chinese had at least one digital product such as mobile phone, camera and computer.
It is no denying that the use of digital products plays an very important role in people’s living standard today. To begin with, these products have given us a colorful world. We can play games with a PSP in hands everywhere, we can take photos with a Canon in pockets everywhere, and we can talk with friends far away with a Nokia as long as we want to. Then, computers and the Internet have made our study and work more convenient. They help us to deal with difficult math problems, to get a great deal o
作文很精彩，不过还有些小小的瑕疵。第一段最后加一句and the like或and so on或etc.第二段的it is no denying改为there is no doubt是不是更习惯一些(个人见解)？也许作者想用一下高级一点的词汇吧。have given改为have been giving表示一个持续的过程，也许好些。第一个everywhere-->wherever,第二个everywhere-->whenever。study-->studies；knowledges-->knowledge;去掉in 后面的our;there is-->there are或者干脆去掉；they-->which,去掉 things后面的we，以及两个to后面的do。以上纯属建议，忘作者体谅本人的无理。呵呵
加油！！我看好你的作文！！！！
写得很格式化。
我也是用过这样套路写四级的，很高分．不过考六级就低了二十几分了～～～！！心痛呀，不然我可以拿更高分了．
10分
such as mobile phone, camera and computer. ---->and 改成or;
It is no denying that the use of digital products plays an very important role in people’s living standard today.--->改成Digital products are the special symbol of the 21 century,they play an important role in people's daily lifes!
or there is some emergencies we can get help immediately. ---->is 改成are;
Finally, some digital products have its artificial intelligence--->its改成their;
they can