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Teary Penguin
Teary Penguin
I believe that many folks know about and are fond of penguins which live in the Antarctica.They are so lovely because of the fat figure.But you may not know many penguins have died of cold!
Carbon dioxide is increasing to discharge to the atmosphere along with the human activity, as a direct result of global warming.In other world,the Antarctica is wamrer than before, Antarctica's average temperature rise of 3 degrees Celsius in the past 50 years. Antarctica’s weather has been raining. Penguin has just born, only a thin layer of warm fur. Small Penguin need 40-day time to grow waterproof feathers,but the entire nests of penguins, Heavy rain for a few days, are wet. Many penguins tend to die because of hypothermia. Experts said that you will never see the penguins within 10 years because of the extinction of penguins.
For my part, We have to recognize the importance of environmental protection. How the penguins

Teary Penguin
Teary Penguin
I believe that many folks know about and are fond of penguins which live in the Antarctica.They are so lovely because of the fat figure.But （what）you may not know（is that） many penguins have died of cold! （添加一些成分让这个句子更有力量）
Carbon dioxide is increasing to discharge （increasingly discharged, 被排放啊）to the atmosphere along with the human activity,（用along with 不准确，along 去掉就可以了） as a direct result of global warming.In other world,（words）the Antarctica is wamrer than before, Antarctica's average temperature rise of （rise of--has risen要用完成时）3 degrees Celsius in the past 50 years. Antarctica’s weather has been raining. （表达不当， Antarctica rains a lot）Penguin has just born, only a thin layer of warm fur.（改成Penguins are born only with a thin layer of warm fur) Small Penguin need 40-day time (40-day time --40 days 就可以了，那个时间不用翻译出来）to grow waterproof feathers,but the entire nests of penguins, Heavy rain for a few days, are wet.
(这句话有问题，想表达准确的意思是什