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Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short essay entitled “Recreational activities”. You should write at least 120 words following the outline given below.
1.娱乐活动多种多样。 2.娱乐活动可以使人们受益，也可能带来危害。 3.作为大学生，我认为……
Recreational activities,having many varieties,is increasing popular.Many people would like join the recreational activities along with the rapit grew of economy.In other way,we need to think from by ourself whether it is good things or not.
Recreational acivities will,some folks argue,take some benefits for us and have something wrong with us.The first one is that folks face the pressure whici is increasing.They need somethings to relax so that making them happy. Another is that sometimes,they extra time,but nonting to do.
Personally，I believe that we should continue to study hard
有些地方写错了。。。they have extra time,but nonting to do.
Recreational activities,having many varieties,is(becoming) increasing (increasingly)popular.Many people would like (to)join the recreational activities along with the rapit(rapid) grew(growth) of economy.In other way,we need to think from by ourself (think from by ourself表达错误， think by ourselves）whether it is good things（things可以去掉） or not.
Recreational acivities will,some folks argue,take（bring 好点） some benefits for us and have something wrong with us.（have something wrong with us你想表达的是什么）The first one is that folks face the pressure whici is increasing.（改成that folks face the increasing pressure 好像好点）They need somethings to relax so that making them happy.（so that making them happy，语法错误，改成to make themselves happy） Another is that sometimes,they （have）extra time,but（have） nonting to do.
Personally，I believe that we should continue to study hard
有问题可以再问我 改的地方在括号里了
没见过那么好的~
他妈的个个都在讨别人的欢心，虽然我看不懂，但我最讨厌这样的人！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！！怒怒怒怒怒怒怒怒怒怒怒怒怒怒怒怒怒怒怒怒怒怒怒怒怒怒怒怒