帮忙看下这几句英文有没有错误

People laugh and people cry.
Some give up but some always try.
Some say hi while some say bye.
Others may forget you, but never I.

总的看来，编得不错。这里我仅加了一个 but 和 一个逗号。

"Others may forget ABOUT you but never WILL I."

Also, you might want to add a comma or a "but" between "some give up" and "some always try".

Nice poem!

回答下面NEOTSU的-
你会说“I will never forget you"还是“I do never forget you" (which can then be shortened as "I never forget you")?
正确的应该是"I will never forget you" （就跟I will always love you一样). 所以这首诗的最后一句应该是"never will I".

没问题

never will I?

如果是正确的语法，应该是never do I

但在诗歌里，可以忽略这一类的词。就是说，可以忍耐某些语法错误的。。

要小心 有的没加s