我这样翻译一句英文可以吗

如果用后置定语表达，那应该是发现没带钥匙为定语,如果用having got home，就不是后置定语表达式了，就翻译为Having got home, I realized that I have forgotten the key.

后置定语表达应该为

I got home realizing that I have forgotten the key.

上面两个翻译中用了take是不对的，那是中文带的意思，英文中带着什么东西用bring，而take有‘取，拿’的意思。

希望对你有帮助。

I realized that i have forgotten to take the key when i got home.

When I got home, I realize that I have forgotten to take the key.
这样才对~

When i got home, I realized that I had forgetten to bring my key!

正确