急!恳请英语达人帮忙修改Purpose Statement(申请香港学校用,全文见补充说明)

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Purpose Statement
I came from Foshan(佛山), a historical city in Guangdong Province. Guangdong born and Guangdong bred, I have been familiar with HongKong from the TV programs and films. When I first got feet on the land of HongKong, the charming city impressed on me deeply. Its perfect combination with east and west tradition, plus its open business atmosphere and prosperity made me fall in love with the city at the first sight. Since then, I have determined to have study experience sometime and even develop my career there if I have the chance.

My future expectation together with the love to the city made me have the courage to apply for the respectful school, Hongkong University. The major which I am eagerly to study for a very long time is the master of Urban Design [MUD] (Full-time). The fundamental reason is that I like advertisement very much and I have the capability to develop in the urban design career.

Perhaps because I have been keen on painting s

I came from Foshan, a historical city in Guangdong Province, Born and growing up in Guangdong, I have been familar with HongKong from mostly the entertament ways like,the TV programs and films.When I first visited HongKong, the charming city impressed me deeply.Its perfect combination of east and west traditons, open business atmasphere and great living enviroment all made me fall in love with this city at the first sight. Since then, I have made my mind to stduy there and even work and live there if I have the chance.

The better study envrioment and my love to HongKong have all made me to apply this respectful school, HongKong University.And I am going to study Urban Design for my master degree, the reason for which is that I lkie advertisment very much and I am confident that I could succeed in this particular field.

I love painting and have been keeping on practicing that ever since I was very young, so I think I was blessed with a special understanding of