我有一篇英文的自我介绍,拜托大家帮我翻译一下,如有错误请大家给我提出来,谢谢

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about me
Good judges! My name is Mao Jian Guo。 I was a lively boy, so I like to make friends. I too am a stubborn person, so I really like the motto: "I am the best I know, the best of my ability, and I mean is to continue to do so until the end," from Abraham Lincoln. I like English, because this is one of the most well-known language in the world. My dream is to go to the United States advanced. Therefore, in order to make the dream a reality, I will do my best!
All this, thank you!
上面的自我介绍是希望之星初赛的自我介绍 请大家帮我改好后,重新腾好,写下来。我追加100分

呃。。。暂且提提建议,仅作参考
首先,开头那句judges,作为名词,是法官的意思,是特殊语境要求么?如果是打招呼,直接说“hi,everyone就可以了,如果有特定的观看这个文章的对象,就直接写“my dearXXX"。
接着:1.lively一般不用来形容人,如果说某人很活跃,那用active就可以了
2.I后边不能跟too,too一般用在句末,用逗号隔开。如果想表达是个"固执己见的人”,stubborn有点严重,通常stubborn的人倔的很厉害。引用名言不能用冒号,在你的这篇介绍中应该把冒号删去,from前加个which来引导从句。
3.language应该为复数,因为是“许多广为人知的语言中的一种”。
4.表达“将来”不用advanced,而是in the future,如果要是想表达“要去先进的美国”(怎么觉得这么诡异)就直接把这个词提到the United States前就行
5.使梦想成真,make the dream to be true;
最后,应该用“that's all,thank you."结尾

Good xxx(按照时间来打招呼)everyone! My name is Mao Jian Guo。 I'm a active boy, so I like to make friends. I am a little stubborn so I really like the motto: "I am the best I know, the best of my ability, and I mean is to continue to do so until the end," which was said by Abraham Lincoln. I like English, because it is one of the most well-known languages in the world. My dream is to go to the United States in the future. Therefore, I will do my be