UC知道求前辈帮我看看作文，28号就要三战托福了！
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第一次写作9分，第二次考21分，28号就要第三次，感觉越写越恶心，大家帮看看，谢谢！
Those in favor of the fact that the ability to get well with the students is the most desirable skill for every teacher.However,what they fail to find out is that the knowledge of teachers' plays a crucial role in helping students to wide their academic field.As a result,what I firmly held view is that the teachers who are knowledgeable bring more benefits to the students.There widespread testimonies for it and the primary ones are listed as follows.
The foremost reason for the phenomenon is the most desirable ability of teacher is their knowledge in certain subject .It is self-evident that the standard of every colledge or university to hire the teacher can be described whether the person who want to be a teacher have a strong ability of teaching certain subject.A survey conducted by the Yale University shows that 90percent teachers devote all their energy to their academic field.From the statistic we can see that the the
Those in favor of the fact that the ability to get well with the students is the most desirable skill for every teacher.However,what they fail to find out is that the knowledge of teachers' plays a crucial role in helping students to wide their academic field.As a result,what I firmly held view is that the teachers who are knowledgeable bring more benefits to the students.There widespread testimonies for it and the primary ones are listed as follows.
The foremost reason for the phenomenon is the most desirable ability of teacher is their knowledge in certain subject .It is self-evident that the standard of every colledge or university to hire the teacher can be described whether the person who want to be a teacher have a strong ability of teaching certain subject.A survey conducted by the Yale University shows that 90percent teachers devote all their energy to their academic field.From the statistic we can see that the the
我也是28号!!
题目没有说诶..不过这个TOPIC貌似就是我练的第一个哦!!
感觉模板的味道比较重, 句子好象不是很简练, 定语从句好多，读起来有点累
可以再准备几个其他句型 比如说强调句啊，
还有，象knowledge of teachers' 就their knowledge 不是也可以么，
要再简练一点
知道为什么你的分数不高吗？因为很多东西明显得和你的实际水平不符合。
你去看看我给其他作文得评论吧，你和他们很像得。
今天没心情再看了
写的不错，不过太长了，要精练
可以考虑换换词啊，把teacher,student别一遍遍说，换成professor,learner什么的，可以改成很多不同的词，换着用可能感觉就好多了，还有可以把例子再充实一下，找一些国际化的万能例子说，然后把它绕到你的主题上
呵呵~~我当时就是这么写的，不知道对你有用不……
嗨