UC知道帮忙修改一下我的英语作文
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The passage tell us although many people is live in poverty and need help they denote their money to help people who suffered from earthquake .
When I read about the Sichuan’s earthquake, I felt very sorry for them . They suffered a lot from the earthquake and they were in great need. They needed our help and concern. I watched the serious damage of the earthquake on TV and I was shocked. I had never watched such a great damage All I can do was to donate a little money to them All the people around me showed their concern and sorrow. Some people went to help they rebuild their homes.
I wish those poor people come over these difficulties and rebuild their home as quickly as possible. There is a saying that: ‘if one place is in difficulty, people of other places will help them’. Now I understand it .I think disasters will never conquered our Chinese people. If we all contribute our love, then people who suffered from the earthquake w
楼上的有好多都没有改过来啊！！
The passage tells us that many people denote their money to help the people who suffered from earthquake although themselves are living in poverty and need help as well.
我把从句的语序稍微改了一下，稍微改了几个词，这样把强调的重点突出出来。
When I learnt about the Sichuan’s earthquake, I felt very sorry for them . They suffered a lot from the earthquake and they were in great pain. They needed our help and concern.
I watched the serious damage caused by the earthquake on TV and I was shocked. I had never watched such a great damage. All I can do was to donate a little money to them. All people around me showed their concern and sorrow. Some people went to help they rebuild their home.
I wish those poor people come over these difficulties and rebuild their home as quickly as possible. As a saying goes: ‘If one place is in difficulty, people of other places will help them’. Now I understand it .I think disasters will never conquer our Chinese people. If we all contribute our