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I am excited about the objective of XXX programme that it aims to strengthen student’s ability of analyzing the inter-connectedness between global politics and global economy, which is more attractive in the time of financial crisis in the world. I have academic background of journalism and abundant experience in this area. In the future, I plan to pursue my professional career in Media industry in Hong Kong, which, as one of the world’s largest financial centres, is sensible to global economic and political conditions. So in order to make my career expectation come true, I shall master global outlook and the skills to examine the world’s political and economic issues as well as their interaction. In addition, I am also attracted to the advanced and modern educational facilities and library resources of your university, which will definitely facilitate my study and help me firm my knowledge in this area up to the most advanced level.
是改错的，不是翻译。
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I am excited about the objective of XXX programme that （aims） to strengthen student’s ability of analyzing the inter-connections between global politics and global economy, which is more attractive （during） the time of financial crisis in the world. I have academic background of journalism and abundant （experiences） in this area. In the future, I plan to pursue my professional career in Media industry in Hong Kong, which, as one of the world’s largest financial centres, is （sensitive） to （the） global economic and political conditions. So in order to make my career expectation come true, I shall master global outlook and the skills to examine the world’s political and economic issues as well as their interaction. In addition, I am also attracted to the advanced and modern educational facilities and library resources of your university, which will definitely facilitate my study and help me firm my knowledge in this area up to the most advanced level.
有改动的地方都用括号标出来了。
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