帮忙看一下我写的英语作文有没有语法问题或错误！~

仅供参考：
More and more students have been using the phone, for this,I make a investigation simply.
The view of students: to use omnidirectionally , because it has many uses:to send the information, to watch the film,to take photos and so on.
The view of parents: not familiar with function partly , because they are not so much initiative with new stuff.
The view of teachers : can be used partly, watching television can not be used in class.
personally,I agree on the teacher's view, for the students, we had better not use the cellphone in the classrom.

意见：你的第一句缺少谓语，构不成句子。去掉SO，不是因为人使用多了，你就调查，没有因果关系。并列的使用相同的句型。

在以后的写作中，要多多练习，注意句子语序，句子成分，习语搭配，时态的协调性。祝你能学好英语。