这篇雅思作文能得几分

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前辈或者老师们觉得这篇表态类作文能得几分?不胜感激!

题:Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?The best way to travel is in a group led by a tour guide

More and more people look upon travel as their most like interest,especially those white-collars who are very busy everyday and always get tired.They enjoy making a travel plan and totally relax themselves in a trip.Travelling in a group led by a tour guide and travelling by yourselves are the two most popular ways .Some people claim that the former one is the best way to travel.But I think it is hard to say which one is the best,because both ways have their advantages and disadvantages.

If you choose to travel in a group,it will be the most convenient way.What you have to do is just pay the travelling group and offer necessary identifications.The travelling group will arrange everything for you,such as air tickets,acommodation,insurance and so on.You just enjoy the trip without other consideration.But travelling i

这骗文章有2大不足
第1,你用的是两边论证的方法写的,这是最流行的一种写法,但是结尾你没有给出你自己的观点.因为题目要求你给出同意或者不同意的观点
第2,整偏文章缺少写连词,连词在IELTS作文考试中非常关键,而且不要总是用and but so 等等基础的连词,应多用however furthermore, in addition等连词.
这是我个人的一点意见,我IETLS作文分也不高,6分.不过我有写好的写作摸板,你的语法还是可以的,加上点技巧会事半功倍
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条理还需更清晰一点,阐述对象在广泛一点,不过总体还不错,加油啦

这骗文章有2大不足
第1,你用的是两边论证的方法写的,这是最流行的一种写法,但是结尾你没有给出你自己的观点.因为题目要求你给出同意或者不同意的观点
第2,整偏文章缺少写连词,连词在IELTS作文考试中非常关键,而且不要总是用and but so 等等基础的连词,应多用however furthermore, in addition等连词.
这是我个人的一点意见,我IETLS作文分也不高,6分.不过我有写好的写作摸板,你的语法还是可以的,加上点技巧会事半功倍
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