十万火急!!2009年宁波市英语中考作文!

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我今天中考刚结束,在家进行第2次估分,麻烦英语水平较高的师傅帮我改一下我写的英语作文大概要扣几分。
作文题目:上星期,学校就学生的作业量问题要求各班召开家长会进行讨论。以下是你班家长的观点:多数家长认为作业多有好处,而部分家长则认为作业过多对孩子的成长不利。请你根据下面方框中的提示,用英语作一简要介绍并表明你自己的观点。
Most parents
◆ review what students have learned
◆ develop students’ minds
◆ stop students playing computer games
◆ …
A few parents
◆ take a lot of time
◆ cannot have a good rest
◆ cannot do the things students like
◆ …
注意:(1)可以适当增加细节,要求意思连贯,语句通顺
(2)词数80左右;短文开头已给出(不计入总词数)
我的作文(括号内为开头):
(Last week our class had a parents' meeting. At the meeting,all the parents talked about whether doing a lot of homework was useful or not.Many parents thought that doing much homework was useful.)They thought a lot of homework can help students review what students have learned and develop students’ minds. A lot of homework can stop students playing computer games. It's good for students to get good grades. But a few parents thought that doing much homew

15分,扣5分.
没有文采,你只是简单的将题目给你的东西联系在一起
如果你的字写得正的话,扣4分``
额```
你是宁波的``我忘了``

应该是1 2 档 ,最后一段,可能会是扣分点``

分数应该不高.全是单句..

Trying To Help Others
Last Sunday, I went to Haimen to go shopping. I saw a lot of people standing in front of the supermarket when I was walking down the street.
I wondered what was happening there. I hurried to go there to take a look. I ran quickly. To my surprise, there was a girl sitting in the street. The girl with a school bag was about 17 years old. There was also a piece of paper in front of her. It said, “…my family don’t have enough money for me to go to school…”
I was very sad to see that. I couldn’t help giving some money to the girl. The girl was very grateful to me. She said, “Thank you!” I was glad to do it. Then I went away with a smile.
That day I had a dream in the evening; I dreamt that I had a lot of money. I did a lot of wonderful things. I helped the poor and the o