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To what extent do you agree or disagree?(题目)
Nowadays, a enlarging number of parents pay more attention to their children's calibre education that how to be a good citizen or worker rather than to be the benefits individuality. In my opinion, I certainly consent of this viewpoint as well.
It's a Chinese old saying goes like that before children learn knowledge, they had to learn how to be a true man. To learn how to be good citizens and works will profits children not only at the contemporary but also in the future. When children graduate from college to hunt job then they will found that for almost every companies who holds interviews to employees not for checking their knowledge but also for considering their qualities and characters. In the contrary, if a child has blossomed competence of benefits of individ
When children graduate from college to hunt job then they will found that for almost every companies who holds interviews to employees not for checking their knowledge but also for considering their qualities and characters.
改成：
When children graduate from college to hunt job, they will find that almost every company holds interviews to employees not for checking their knowledge but also for considering their qualities and characters.
In the contrary, if a child has blossomed competence of benefits of individuality but dilapidated manner and lack of sense of obligation, even the child in a period of time attains a sum of fortune, yet the consequence may endangers the child himself/herself, their family and maybe the society.
改成
In the contrary, if a child has blossomed competence of benefits of individuality but dilapidated manner and sense of obligation, even the child may attains a sum of fortune in a period of time, yet the conseq