请各位高手帮我批改一下初中英语作文

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要求：假如你是明明，您父亲长期在外工作，父亲节快到了，你很想念父亲，很感谢父亲给了你一个温暖的家，让你过着幸福的生活。请根据提示内容，给父亲写一封电子邮件。
注意：1.短文必须包括所有要点2.可适当发挥3.60-80字

Dear father,
How are you?Father's Day is coming soon.Are U okay this days?I miss you very much at this time of the year. I know ,because of your work and for me a better life,you have to be away from our family.But it seems that you always beside in my heart.Thank you for giving me so prefect life.I am very happy with u .You show me what is deep as sea.I will work hard to make you feel warm.
Please take good of yourself.I will always love u.
love,
Mingming

My Dear Father:

How are You?

Father's Day is coming soon. I miss you so much at this time of the year. I understand that you have to be away from our home due to your work in order to let me have a better living. But, you are always in my heart. Thank you for giving me a perfect life. I am very proud of you. You have shown me what is as deep as the sea. I will study hard to appreciate your contribution.

Please take care of yourself.

Lovely yours,

Mingming.

1.第3句错了，是these days 不是this days
2.Thank you for giving me so prefect life.
改成such a perfect life
3.Please take good of yourself
错了，take good care of
4.I will always love u
改成 I will love you forever更好
5.I know ,because of your work and for me a better life,you have to be away from our family.
这句话念起来不顺，改成I know that you have to be away from our family
to work because you'd like to give me a better life.
6.应该