UC知道这篇托福作文能得几分？
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As to whether young adults shoud get independence from their parents,I think the answers vary.This issue is widely discussed but we can't conclude a specific conclusion to say which is better.
Some people may think young adults shoud get the independence because as time goes by,they have to go to the society to enjoy their own life whithout the help of their parents.If they are too reliable to their parents,they won't accommodate to the challenge of the society well.Maybe they would get horrified of the society.For an extreme example,one of my friends even can't cook a meal and has never done any housework since he was born.So,many people hold the opinion that we shoud give the young adults more indenpendence from their parents.
But on the contrary,there are also some people holding the opposite opinion toward this issue.They think that young adults shoud live with their families for a longer time,for the young adults are not mature enough to deal with some big
Some people may think young adults shoud get the independence because as time goes by,they have to go to the society to enjoy their own life whithout the help of their parents.If they are too reliable to their parents,they won't accommodate to the challenge of the society well.Maybe they would get horrified of the society.For an extreme example,one of my friends even can't cook a meal and has never done any housework since he was born.So,many people hold the opinion that we shoud give the young adults more indenpendence from their parents.
But on the contrary,there are also some people holding the opposite opinion toward this issue.They think that young adults shoud live with their families for a longer time,for the young adults are not mature enough to deal with some big
还是不错的，在example上有些薄弱，用托福名师李笑来的话说，托福作文就是举例子要specific details 叙述有些多了
Some people may think young adults shoud get the +that
can't 全部用cannot替换
one of my friends even can't cook a meal and has never done any housework since he was born. 这句话没错，不过一般来说and前后时态一致
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注意一些小错，因为你考试的时候是没有word自动纠正的
加油！
满分吧。。
虽然我没太看懂。。
但应该没什么大的毛病吧？
祝你得满分
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