UC知道哪位高手看看我这篇雅思作文多少分
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Topic:The development of agriculture brings new farming machines,farming factories and new types of fruits and vegetables. To what extent do you think the advantages outweigh the disadvantage?
In present-day society,agriculture develops at staggering rate in many countries.A great deal of nations and individuals benefit from development of agriculture. This development brings new farming machines,farming factories and creative tpes of food. AS far as I concerned,the srengths of the view outweigh the weaknesses .
It is obviously that development of agriculture is beneficial to numerous areas. To begin with,it can not denied that using technology can raise production efficiency ,for example,operating new farming machines enhance product's quality and conserve time. Moreover,as more efficiency of production,the products will be more competitive.In the whole market,which farmers can gain more consumers and build up their honor and credit among a hos
In present-day society,agriculture develops at staggering rate in many countries.A great deal of nations and individuals benefit from development of agriculture. This development brings new farming machines,farming factories and creative tpes of food. AS far as I concerned,the srengths of the view outweigh the weaknesses .
It is obviously that development of agriculture is beneficial to numerous areas. To begin with,it can not denied that using technology can raise production efficiency ,for example,operating new farming machines enhance product's quality and conserve time. Moreover,as more efficiency of production,the products will be more competitive.In the whole market,which farmers can gain more consumers and build up their honor and credit among a hos
非专业人士，仅以一个考过雅思，作文6分的人给一些意见，我当时上了新东方的课，但是一次练习也没做过，考试的时候字数绝对达不到要求。但结果如新东方老师所说，6分要求的就是结构清楚正确不离题的作文。
看的出来你也接受过培训，文章结构清楚，每段首句都点明了该段的重点，句型和连接词多变，不重复，虽然有些地方用的不太妥当。
但结构上有一个问题，既然你的观点是农业发展利大于弊，那么关于论证有利的那段应该写在后面。
如果没有这个问题我觉得肯定能拿6分。
如果你只想拿6分，那我建议尽量play safe. 你的长句用的比较多，有些地方肯能为了增加字数而显的啰嗦，这样比较容易出错。如果你想拿高分，那么还要多下功夫，务必做到正确。不然本来可以加分的部分都被错误抵消了。
再改下语法错误，应该能得6
建议你逻辑更清晰些，不要太罗嗦
有些词用的很华丽，但语法结构也要华丽才行！
要注意语法问题，作文还要改一下，应该就能拿5.5分了
我给你分析一下你的英语毛病，并不是仅仅针对的作文~
首先是时态，你用的比较混乱~这个东西好改自己把每个句子整理一下，就是写完了了自己检查一下，写的时候也要注意~~想一下~习惯就好了
再有就是一些语法错误，你可以放到WORD里自己检查一下，放网上该太麻烦了~
最后是词语的用法不是很地道~~这个你想要6分只要不是太离谱就没什么了，尽量用有根据的词汇的句式吧~~