高考英语作文请评分

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假设你是李华,你的英国笔友Bob将于九月到你所在城市的建新华文学校学中文,来信请你在学校附近为他找一套住房。请根据图画提供的信息,写信介绍住房的情况,并告知住房面积为25平方米,月租500元。

注意:1.词数:100左右:
2.参考词汇:房租—Tent(n.).

I’m very happy to receive your letter, and I’m glad to hear that you will go to China to learn Chinese here. I have already found a fiat for you. It is on Fangcao Street, which is not far from Jianxin Chinese School. Bus No.11 can take you there, and it is one stop before the Chinese School. The flat is on the third floor with 3 rooms, one of which is bedroom, the other two are bathroom and kitchen. There are a bed, a sofa, a desk and some chairs in this 25 square-metres small fiat, and the rent is 500 yuan per month. Maybe this fiat is not as good as your wish, but I’ll try my best to meet your needs. If it is not suitable enough, write to me and I will look for another better place.
Hope you will come here soon!
All the best!
Yours,
Li Hua

满分25分请评分谢谢

1、I’m glad to hear that you will go to China to learn Chinese here.(go to...here矛盾)
2、If it is not suitable enough, write to me and I will look for another better place. (another better place这样表达更好些 a better one,简单明了)
3、 I have already found a fiat for you. It is on Fangcao Street, which is not far from Jianxin Chinese School.(定语从句先行词指代不明)
4、There are a bed, a sofa, a desk and some chairs in this 25 square-metres small fiat.(there 是就近原则)

我能给16分!