帮忙改下TOEFL作文吧! 谢谢~

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作文上次考才18分,所以想请高手指点一下,小的在这儿谢恩了~
Nowadays, university students usually have several options to live .Some may live at home ,or some may live in university dormitory while others may live in private apartment. The most two popular means are dwelling in university dormitory and apartment in the community. Not taking finance into consideration, I would select to live in apartment rather than living in dormitory, since not only do I feel more privacy, I may also obtain greater opportunities to communicate with others in community.
Some students prefer to live in university rather than living off campus. They believe accommodating in university dormitory is safer because the guard keeps a close watch on the dorms .In addition, only under special circumstances when students live on campus ,can they be provided more convenient access to the university library ,gym and classes. simultaneously, they may save money on gas to drive to school and time lost on the way home every sing

Nowadays, university students usually have several options to live .Some may live at home ,or some may live in university dormitory while others may live in private apartments. The most two popular means are dwelling in university dormitory and apartment in the community. Not taking financial ability into consideration, I would select to live in apartment rather than living in dormitory, since not only do I preserve more privacy, I may also obtain greater opportunities to communicate with others in community.

Some students prefer to live in university rather than living off campus. They believe accommodating in university dormitory is safer because the guard keeps a close watch on the dorms .In addition, students live on campus ,can they be provided more convenient access to the university library ,gym and classes. simultaneously, they may save money on gas to drive to school and time lost on the way home every single day .For instance, a student who residents in