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Long long ago,I had a dream to make a swing in my bedroom.Now,I am glad because it has come true.

On National Day,my family moved into a new house,so I can realize the dream by this chance.My father and I made the swing together. We went shopping for wood and rope.In the end,we did it ourselves succussfully.Consequently,after finishing it,we got a huge sense of achievement and satisfaction.The swing,I like it very much.

The swing reminds me of my childhood.Of course,the time in my heart was soft and sweet.When I was a little child,I always went around with a group of elder brothers and sisters.They took me outside to be close to the nature.We chased butterflies and dragonflies,we waded across rivers and streams.It made me happy.I never forget the time that we tied a rope to the tree and used it as a swing.We played on the swing and laughed all the time.Our world ,surrounded by warm sunshine,lovely animals,green trees, and beautiful flowers,happy with the voices

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