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帮忙检查一下有错吗？
My name is …I study in …Middle School. I’m a smart、out-going and activity girl . I like English and math. But I can’t do well in Chinese. I often feel stupid when I get a bad mark.. I like sport very much, I often win a price in a competition.
My father is a careful and clever man. He likes action movies best, but he doesn't like thriller or documentaries. He always tells me lots of philosophical stories and teaches me how to behave. I admire him very much and view him as my model. My mother is pretty and a little bit shy. She likes Beijing Opera best, she also doesn't like thrillers, because they're scary. She gives me very thoughtful take care, when I'm sad she anxiety me, when I'm happy she blessing me, she is my gulf.
I love my parents. they did not only give me my life, but also abundant knowledge and ample spirit for which i should guarantee them a lifetime of love in return.
My name is …I study in …Middle School. I’m a smart、out-going and activity girl . I like English and math. But I can’t do well in Chinese. I often feel stupid when I get a bad mark.. I like sport very much, I often win a price in a competition.
My father is a careful and clever man. He likes action movies best, but he doesn't like thriller or documentaries. He always tells me lots of philosophical stories and teaches me how to behave. I admire him very much and view him as my model. My mother is pretty and a little bit shy. She likes Beijing Opera best, she also doesn't like thrillers, because they're scary. She gives me very thoughtful take care, when I'm sad she anxiety me, when I'm happy she blessing me, she is my gulf.
I love my parents. they did not only give me my life, but also abundant knowledge and ample spirit for which i should guarantee them a lifetime of love in return.
楼上的有误！
第2段第一句carefull要改为carefully
修饰名词是要用形容词的，用careful没错！
个人认为：第2段第3行a little bit重复，a little 即可
第4行she also doesn't like thrillers应改为
she doesn't like thrillers ，either.
She gives me very thoughtful take care,这句有误
改为：She takes care of me very thoughtfully.
或者改为：She gives me very thoughtful care.
第一句I study in如果是小地方的话要用at,第2段第一句carefull要改为carefully,第2段第4行是病句？其它应该没问题了。