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My Day In Winter Vacation
Today is Wednesday, January 25th, 2006. And the Spring Festival will coming. This year, the Spring Festival is on January 29th. So, we must get ready before that day. And today, I go home at 10:00 a.m. Because I go my grandparents’ home yesterday to take some things for the Spring Festival. And then, at 11:45,I eat some foods from grandparents’ home for lunch. My grandmother makes them for one night. So, they’re very tasty and nutritional. At 1:00p.m, I watch TV. All of TV programs are about the Spring Festival. At around 3:00,I start to do my homework. I eat super with my father at about 6:30 cause today we eat a lot of seafood. About 7:40,I by bike go out to play. Most of the people in the whole street are in red and very happy. They hope the Spring Festival comes quickly.
My days in winter vacation are all very happy. Because the Spring Festival will coming. It’s the symbol of the happy and health.

My Day In Winter Vacation (One Day In Winter Vacation)
Today is Wednesday, January 25th, 2006. And the Spring Festival will coming.(is coming up) This year, the Spring Festival is on January 29th. So, we must get ready before that day. And today, I go home at 10:00 a.m. Because I go (went to) my grandparents’ home yesterday to take some things for the Spring Festival. And then, at 11:45,I eat (ate) some foods from (in) grandparents’ home for lunch. My grandmother makes (made) them for one night(day, lunch指中午饭). So, they’re(they were) very tasty and nutritional. At 1:00p.m, I watch(watched) TV. All of TV programs are about the Spring Festival. At around 3:00,I start (started) to do my homework. I eat(ate) super with my father at about 6:30 cause (because) today we eat(ate) a lot of seafood. About 7:40,I by bike go out to play.(At about 7:40, I went out to play by bike.) Most of the people in the whole street are(were) in red and very happy. They hope(hoped that) the Spring Fes