帮忙看看有什莫错误,谢谢!
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From my point of view a magority of students want to study in university lead to educative resource jam.so i suggest govemment encourage students go to vocational to study.not only study in college would be succeed
帮忙改一下
chart-charts the-The makeing-making "make up of"用在这里有点勉强啊,可改成"the construction of" 即改成The first one is about the construction of students which are in high school in our city.后面的那句话成分很乱呢,The chart shows that 91%of native students and 8&of other students is 后面的部分表意混乱 无法修改呢 "workers"和"ladies and gentlemen"都是名词 不能直接放在一起 而且"ladies and gentlemen"很少用在学生身上,用简单的"boys and girls"即可。可改成:workers' boys and girls(不过就算改了,文法上是没错,但在口语上非常别扭,你想表达什么意思呢)还有两个句子不能简单并列,中间要有连词“while others(不加s也可以,但要在后面加students) are abroading."(真得不明白你要说什么呢,泪飘)请注意使用负数形式"students"一般单个学生时才使用”student" 只有两副图时指另一副时可使用“another"当然”the other"也没错啦 "In this chart"后请用逗号隔开“choice"是名词,这里要用动词”choose"得过去式“chose","the university"前请加"go to"(用法类似于go to school)后面的部分也要依葫芦画瓢地修改。即:In this chart,60%of students chose to go to the university and 30%of students would rather go to the vocational shool. And the res