请帮我看看这段话的错误

来源：百度知道 编辑：UC知道 时间：2024/09/20 11:52:37
During my school time, I have got six times scholarship and successful passed CET6. Besides, I have learned the business training and had some working experience. So I am confident that I am the suitable candidate for the job.

时态改一下，完成时改为过去时。一些动词也改一下。
During my school time, I were granted six times scholarship and successfully passed CET6. Besides, I have learned the business training and got some working experience. So I am confident of being a eligible candidate.

i have got 改成 i have gotten

successful passed 改成successfully

candidate for the job candidate换成 applicant恰当点

就这些咯 反正比较中士英语一点类~