UC知道像我这种英语水平是不是很糟糕?
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I got a news that a 12 years old girl was kidnapped in the Old Street of Yuexi county,the criminal required her parents for 8000 yuan to redeem the girl,but her parents didn't give them the money,they called the police,but
the girl was killed by the criminal as the cops hurried to the scence,they use a knife gashed on her face which is so bloody,The local city residents blamed those cops didn't deal with the case efficently.That's ture,if the cops can't discover the case fastly,we will think we are living in an unsafety place...........
我大概只会写出这种水平,不知有没有错误什么的,....................
啊呀,不学英语了~~~好烦~~
总体来说 你的英语还不错 因为你可以把一件事情叙述清楚。
我想你需要加强的是句子的连接。其实你可以几个简单的句子分开来做。我看你的中间有很多逗号。
第二就是个别词的时态，语态要多注意。
下面是我做的修改以供你参考。
A case happend in my hometown
I got a piece of news that a 12 years old girl was kidnapped in the Old Street of Yuexi county. The criminal asked her parents for 8000 yuan to redeem the girl. Her parents didn't give them money and called the police.
Finally the girl was killed by the criminal. When the cops hurried to the scene and the crimials used a knife gashed on her face which is so bloody. The local residents blamed those cops hadn’t dealt with the case efficiently.That's ture, if the cops has't discovered the case in advance the tragedy may not happen.. Want an unsafe place we’re living in now!
完全看懂了你的意思，语言就是用来表达传递思想的，别人能理解你的意思，说明语言的功能达到了。有一些语法错误，但是，你会把英语学的很好！努力吧~
确实有些错误，同时有些词汇用的不恰当，可能中文这个意思对的，但英文就该用另外一种表达方式。你能用英文顺畅的表述这样一个事件就不错了，水平的提高智能慢慢来，不能苛求。
额。。用词有些问题
可能词汇量不够大
比如绑架犯 不应该叫做crimina